Hi Ashley,
Thank you for putting this piece together, answering the question, “Will My Digital Footprint Really Last A Lifetime?” Found it extremely engaging from the beginning and loved the enlightenment it ultimately provided.
The clear and concise references provided in the piece perfectly showcase your intentions and beliefs. Helping pave the reader's understanding of the issue and providing quality to your writing through trust and credibility.
The conclusion of the piece successfully highlighted the outcome of your critical thinking as it showcased your purpose. In this case, providing your future students with a “safe and positive experience both in the digital world and in the real one.” This was done exceptionally well as it provided an ‘action plan’ to your piece and highlighted the importance of the issue.
Overall, the only possible issue I could point out was creating better flow in your writing. At times it felt as though the following statements were a little unrelated to the sentences before.
Kind regards
-Zaid
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